Financial talk

I am a Teen writing a teen novel Please disregard this Flaw. I am sorry about the first paragraph if it offends you. Chapter 1~ A new place a new Life Just imagine that your Dad died because of an I.E.D and your mom died in a car crash and you were holding your mom when she took her last breaths. Well, that’s what happened to me. Those were the worst days of my life. My mom’s name was Amber and my dad’s name was Adam. He was an Army soldier and she was basically a soldier’s wife. They were always together, and always on my butt about my homework. Well, now I’m on my way to live with my Uncle Harold Reid. He was a really great friend to my parents. I met him when I was about two. My cousin Mason and I are like brother and sister. He has always been like an older brother to me in many ways, but we don’t have a lot of chances to talk since he graduated about three years ago and is now in college. I’m taking his room until he comes and visits me in about a year or two. I’m a guitar-playing, singing girl. I don’t like country; I like rock, like Bullet for My Valentine and Drop Dead Gorgeous. I have one weakness though, and the band’s name is called Tickle Me Pink. They gave me a letter when I was 14. I’m Abby Smith, born and raised in Colorado. I’m supposed to be a tan, brunette, snowboarding, athletic, Denver Bronco-lover. But I’m not. I’m pale, blonde, I play guitar, I’m somewhat athletic, and a Jets lover. I’m fifteen, but I’ll be sixteen on December eighteenth. My birthday, as it happens, is on a Monday. The plane takes about 7 hours to get to Port Angels and then a whole 2 hours to get to Ione Washington. I like Doctor Russell. I go help clean her house and she gives me money so I can get new books and a new guitar. Her daughter, Ella Russell, is so cool. She helped me buy my first guitar. Uncle Harold really likes to show me that he cares about me, so he wraps his 5 foot 8 inch-tall body around me and squeezes me so hard that I can’t breathe. Then I say, “How’s it going?” He always tells me what happened in the last year or two, and then with my casual face I say, “Cool.” “I’m so sorry about your mom and dad, Abby,” he said as I arrived at the airport, with a tear in his eye. “You stay as long as you want, ok!” “Thank you Uncle H, I appreciate that you’re doing this for me.” He then wiped away the tear and said with a smile, “No problem.” I had only three suitcases with all my stuff from my house including the clothes from my drawers. It was no problem to get all the stuff in the car. Two hours of sitting in the car, we talked about Mason, Uncle H said he was doing ok and he was getting married to a girl named Sabrina I’m happy for him, but would be delighted to see him here at home. He told me about Ella and how she got married to a guy named Mark I’m happy to see she’s happy. He had already got me registered for school so I could go on Monday. Then we sat in the car for the rest of the time while I listened to Nickelback, my mom’s favorite band, on my new IPod. Ione was a gray place, unlike my friends I like having my room dark it was great for me here. The trees are like a maple oak mix it is really pretty here. The population was 508 people well actually it is 509 now that I’m here. We finally got to the house my Aunt Cheri came out screaming like always. It took me two trips to get all my bags upstairs. My room was a light green, with a mahogany bed it looked liked it was about to fall apart, the dresser was in the other room so I had double the space. I had my own bathroom which is great. The best thing I like about my Aunt Cheri and Uncle Harold was that they did’t care what I did just as long as I left a note or didn’t get hurt, that’s hard with me because I broke three bones while rollerblading. I put all my things away where I was supposed to and went down stairs to talk with my Aunt C. I made dinner macaroni and cheese with hot dogs. After dinner I put all the stuff away in the dish washer and went to take a shower. The shower wasn’t used often but it was ok with me. I then brushed my hair in to a pony tail and brushed my teeth. I said Good night to my Uncle H and Aunt C then went to bed with a glass of water waiting for school to start the next day. again please disregard the Grammer flaw I thank you for your time! I am thinking of calling it A New days end, Darkness or sun set. If you have a name for it please tell me I am Adding detail as we speak I am makeing it longer and more discriptive